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We needed to answer these stupid questions as a first English 'Task'
I would appreciate some help :T Please feel free to correct grammar, or to add some stuff.
(I need to have around 5 sentences at every question, I'm pretty far away from that now.)

Every person who helps will get 5 karma cookies :T

BTW: This isn't real; I made up most of the stuff.
EDIT:You can use your fantasy for some questions, as long as it makes sense, my teacher will buy it :T



1)What is your culinary top three?
Do you like to eat/cook?
What is your most popular dish? What are the things you don't eat?
My culinary top three is pizza, which I can’t stop eating. Literally. Pizza is followed by spaghetti and chips.
Although I like eating much, I don’t like to cook, I even can’t cook, not even a simple thing such as making an
egg is hard for me.
Things that I don’t eat are shrimps and lobster, I really don’t like those things.
2)What gives you your artistic/intellectual delight?
(music/films/books/photography)
My delight is watching a movie, and really enjoying watching it.
I hate movies that seem to be good, but actually aren’t that at all.
I prefer movies from Quentin Tarantino, he’s my favorite director. I’m watching his next film next week in
cinemas.
Another delight of me used to be taking the perfect picture, I used to take my camera and just walk in my
Street and take pretty nice shots of various things. Unfortunately I quit that hobby of mine when I broke my camera.

3)How does heaven look like for you?
Heaven is for me a place without hunger, racial hate, war,… A place with always sunny weather, where it
ever rains,… Everything is happy with what they got, and everybody is equal. That’s a heaven for me.
4)What is hell for you?
Hell would for me is losing someone very close to me, a close friend, family member.
If someone like that would happen my world would literally fall apart.


5)Favorite one night stand?
I would say Jessica Alba. She is one of the hottest persons alive in my opinion.
From all the women on the planet, I would definitely choose her.
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I even can’t cook, not even a simple thing such as making an
egg is hard for me.
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I would word this like: "I Can't even cook" instead of "Even Can't", It just sounds better to me and (I think) It's what I was taught :tongue:

2)What gives you your artistic/intellectual delight?
My delight is watching a movie, and really enjoying watching it.
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Is the second "Watching" really needed? You can tell what "It" is by when you mentioned a movie :pimp:

Unfortunately I quit that hobby of mine when I broke my camera.
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Large space, lol.

where it ever rains,…
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Where it.. ever rains? :holmes:

If someone like that would happen my world would literally fall apart.
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I think you mean "something", not someone :cool:

5)Favorite one night stand?
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Nothing to fix, the question just made me lol :gangster:

She is one of the hottest persons alive in my opinion.
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I suppose "persons" isn't exactly wrong, but "One of the hottest girls alive" or "One of the hottest people alive" would sound better
(Except now I keep saying the repentance over and over with "People" and its starting to sound less and less correct.)


Excelent job though, A lot are probably just my personal preferance, but You got most of it 100% :woot:

(If you are going to give me cookies, remember I don't want any more than 69, ever :doh3:)

Glad to help ;)
 
my camera.
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1 space to much :D

About some things im not really sure. But i think most things look fine i guess.
Although i suck at grammar.

Oh jeez theres gp the grammar machine, i was to slow :(

Oh and gp u have 69 now.
 
Wow ! Thanks guys ! I'm fixing all the stuff now, I want to reward you both with 5 cookies, but Gpow doesn't want my cookies.
So I'll only give Mafia 5 :P

"What's wrong with my cookieeeeeeeeees :["


Anyway thank you guys ! Really appreciated :T
I'm fixing and printing this within 5 minutes :V
 
Final version :

1)What is your culinary top three?
Do you like to eat/cook?
What is your most popular dish? What are the things you don't eat?
My culinary top three is pizza, which I can’t stop eating. Literally. Pizza is followed by spaghetti and
chips.
Although I like eating much, I don’t like to cook, I can’t even cook, not even a simple thing such as making an egg is hard for me.
Things that I don’t eat are shrimps and lobster, I really don’t like those things.

2)What gives you your artistic/intellectual delight?
(music/films/books/photography)
My delight is watching a movie, and really enjoying it.
I hate movies that seem to be good, but actually aren’t that at all.
I prefer movies from Quentin Tarantino, he’s my favorite director. I’m watching his next film next week in cinemas.
Another delight of me used to be taking the perfect picture, I used to take my camera and just walk in
my street and take pretty nice shots of various things. Unfortunately I quit that hobby of mine when I broke my camera.

3)How does heaven look like for you?
Heaven is for me a place without hunger, racial hate, war,… A place with always sunny weather, where it never rains,… Everything is happy with what they got, and everybody is equal. That’s a heaven for me.

4)What is hell for you?
Hell would for me is losing someone very close to me, a close friend, family member.
If something like that would happen my world would literally fall apart.
Another ‘hell’ for me would be getting punished for something serious, when it’s not my fault at all.

5)Favorite one night stand?
I would say Jessica Alba. She is one of the hottest people alive in my opinion.
From all the women on the planet, I would definitely choose her.
I always had a ‘thing’ for her, if you can even call it that.
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Fix: Although I like eating a lot, I don’t like to cook. I can’t cook. Not even a simple thing such as an egg, it's hard for me.
Fix: Two foods I don’t eat is shrimps and lobster. I really don’t like those things.

Fix: My delight is watching a movie, and really enjoying it.
Fix: I hate movies that seem to be great, but actually aren’t that good at all.
Fix: I prefer movies from Quentin Tarantino, he’s my favorite director. I’m watching his next film in cinemas next week.
Fix: Another one of my delights I used to have is taking perfect pictures. I used to take my camera and just walk along my street and take pretty nice shots of various things. Unfortunately, I quit that hobby when I broke my camera.

Fix: Heaven for me is a place without hunger, racial hate, war… A place that's always sunny, where it never rains… Everyone is happy with what they got, and everybody is equal. That’s a heaven for me.
Add: Heaven is a dream for all those too blinded by faith to see what's right infront of them.

Fix: Hell for me is like losing someone very close; a friend, a family member. If something like that would happen my world would literally fall apart.

Fix: I would say Jessica Alba. In my opinion she is one of the hottest people alive. From all the women on the planet, I would definitely choose her.
Add: Chuck Norris would be my hands-down all time favorite choise. Just look at those abs!
 
Wow thanks Zez !
I'm sure you made me go up a lot of points !
I followed all of your advice, except the "foods" thing, it just doesn't sounds right :p

Thanks man, you earned 10 cookies for sure <3
Oh and I might keep Zezombia.com if you keep helping me like this with English tasks :V
 
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